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A Storm to be remembered

At five o'clock in the evening on an October day, not unlike any other, it was windy but clear outside. Then suddenly, the clouds began moving in. It got really dark and started thundering and raining. Streaks of lightening were reflecting on the windows. The wind began to whirl loudly and then it blew even harder. I heard the loud noise of a tree breaking outside. This was a storm to never be forgotten.
I was watching TV with my mom and sisters when suddenly, the power went out. It was so dark in the house that I couldn't see anything. We had to use flashlights to get around in a small and cold apartment. I’m glad we had flashlights. My mom suggested that we all go into the basement. But we decided that it wouldn't be a good idea since we wouldn´t be able to hear very well down there.
I looked outside, it was so dark and gloomy and the rain was coming down very hard. I could hear rain drops hitting the window. Blue flashes of lightening kept shining through the window. All of us were quiet and calm except for my sister. She was so frightened of the lightning that she jumped on the couch and put her hands over her ears.

There was a knock on our door. When we opened it, a fireman was standing there. The fireman was a tall muscular dark-haired guy. That was a little bit under 6 ft. He came to report the fire that was outside of our house.
The fireman asked us if we had anywhere to stay the night since it was unsafe. We said that we didn't, and that we couldn't call anyone because the phone wasn't working. It was a very --------scene ;The power line which was above several trees in front of our house was on fire. Sparks of fire were running through the power the line, and obscure smoke was in the air. The fireman walked slowly off the porch to report the news to the other neighbors. Then he got in the fire truck put on the sirens and proceeded to take off.
My brother arrived and told us that he came over to check on us because no one answered the telephone. He lives on the other side of town and wasn't affected by the storm. He decided to take us to stay at his house until the storm was over. We stopped of on the way to buy some blankets and pillows and since we hadn't eaten anything yet, we went to Mc Donald’s to get a hot meal. While we were at my brother's house, we played board games and watched the local news. In addition, we watched movies, ate popcorn, and talked to each other all night. My mom decided to go next door and play bingo with her friend since she really didn't care to watch movies or play any of the games. We played the board games for a couple more hours, and then went to sleep. I'm glad we had somewhere to go during the storm, rather than staying home in a dark house.

The following morning, we awoke and ate the breakfast that I prepared. I decided to cook, since my brother had a long day at work and had stayed up all night with us. Later, we packed our things to return home.

When we arrived at our house, the neighborhood was a disaster; there were trees and branches everywhere. In front of our house was the huge tree that had fallen, and the power line was hanging down in the street. It was so hard for anyone to walk on the sidewalks that when they passed by, they walked in the street. The streets were so full of tree branches that it was very hard for cars and people to pass through. A lot of the cars on the street had to be moved to other locations. The next door neighbor was so upset that she called the city. Her son uses the yellow school bus and it wouldn't be able to pass through the debris on the street to pick him up.

My mom was disappointed because she had just brought groceries and all of the food in the fridge had spoiled because the electricity was out. We waited about 2 hours for the people to come to restore the power. It was a great thing that we had flashlights to use for seeing around the house. Later, my brother took us to the store to buy more groceries, helped us with the house cleaning and picked up some of the branches and rubbish that was in the yard. After he said goodbye to everyone and left, my mom, my sisters, and I looked at each other, thinking that even though we had been through a bad storm, we were happy that we were all safely together.

That day everything was back to normal. It was hot and the sun was shining just like there had never been a storm. The power was back on and everything was working properly again. All was quiet and calm. The only sound was of the cars passing by. The landlord came to remove the big tree that had fallen and the power people came to repair the downed power lines. Even though the noisy neighbor seems to worry about everyone; she was very helpful by calling someone to help during the storm.

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Storm to be Remembered

paragraph 1. In the month of October, not like any other day, it was windy, but clear outside. It started thundering and raining. It got really dark outside, and the clouds began moving. Streaks of lightning were reflected in the windows, and I could hear the loud noise of a tree breaking outside. The wind was whirling and making a loud noise. The wind started blowing even harder; this was a storm to never be forgotten.

paragraph 2. It was five o'clock at night, and I was watching TV with my mom and sisters. Then the electricity went out. It was so dark in the house; I couldn't see anything. We used flashlights to get around the small crowded house. My mom suggested we all go in the clammy basement, but we decided that wasn't a good idea, since we couldn't hear as well if we went down there. When I looked outside it was dark and gloomy. The clouds appeared black and gray. It was raining very hard; I could hear rain drops hit the windows. The noise was so loud it sounded like someone was taping the outside of the windows. Then I saw lightning and blue flashes that kept showing on the windows.

paragraph 3. All of us were quiet and calm except my sister. She was scared of the lightning. She was so frightened; she jumped on the couch and put her hands over her ears. Suddenly, there was a knock on our door. We opened the door quickly, a fireman was standing there. The fireman was a tall muscular dark-haired guy. That was a little bit under 6 ft. He came to report the fire that was outside of our house. The fireman asked us if we had anywhere to stay for the night, since it was unsafe. We said no. We couldn't call anyone because the phone wasn't even working. Then he say said, “Ok”, and ran quickly down the stairs, and went to the next house. He got in the fire truck, put on the sirens and proceeded to take off. It was a very shocking scene; the power line which was above several trees in front of our house was on fire. Sparks of fire were running through the power line, and obscure smoke was in the air.

paragraph 4. Later, my brother showed up at the house. He told us he called several of times, but no one had answered. After my brother seen how the storm effected us, he drove us to McDonald’s to get hot tasty value meals and cold drinks in his classic red Pontiac. Since we had not eaten anything that night, we were starving. Next we went to stay at my brother's apartment until the storm was over. He took us to the store to buy some blankets and pillows. He had just moved in his house, so he didn't have too much linen. During the time that we stayed at my brother's, we watched the local news. In addition, we watched movies, ate popcorn, and talked to each other all night. My mom decided to go next door and play bingo with her friend, since she really didn't care to watch movies or play any of the games. We played the board games for about a couple more hours then went to sleep. I'm glad we had somewhere to go during the storm, which I prefer any day than staying home in a dark house. On the following morning, we awoke and had a simple breakfast at my brother's house. I cooked pancakes and made some fresh brewed coffee, since my brother had a long day at work and was up all night with us. We got our things packed for our return home.

paragraph 5. When we arrived at our house, the neighborhood was a disaster; there were trees and branches everywhere. In front of our house was the huge tree that had fallen. The street was full of clutter, it looked as if piles of rubbish was everywhere. The power line was hanging down in the street. The tree branches were on the sidewalks and in the streets, it was very hard for cars and people to pass through. The neighbor that lives next door was so bothered she called the city because her son rides the yellow bus and the bus had to pick him up in another location. Subsequently, we waited two hours for Consumers Energy to arrive. Thankfully, we had flashlights to use to see around the house. All our food had spoiled in the house since the fridge was not working properly, because the electricity was out. My brother took us to get groceries immediately, since my mom was disappointed and angry because she had just bought groceries.

paragraph 6. Afterwards, he sat down with us for an hour. We talked and watched some TV. We continued watching the local news to make sure we were informed of anything new. In the meantime, my brother helped us with the house cleaning and picked up some rubbish that were in the yard. After that, he said goodbye to everyone and left. Me, my mom, and sisters looked at each other thinking: even though we were in a bad storm we were happy that we all were together safe.

paragraph 7. Finally, everything was back to normal. The sun was gleaming, the weather was hot and everyone was enjoying it. All was silent and relaxed, all one could hear was cars passing by. The power was back on and everything was working properly


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