Posts Tagged ‘rain drops’

can you help me to correct this?

Saturday, November 7th, 2009

A Storm to be remembered
At five o’clock in the evening on an October day, not unlike any other, it was windy but clear outside. Then suddenly, the clouds began moving in. It got really dark and started thundering and raining. Streaks of lightening were reflecting on the windows. The wind began to whirl loudly and [...]

this essay its correct? its a narrative and descriptive essay?

Sunday, November 1st, 2009

Storm to be Remembered
paragraph 1. In the month of October, not like any other day, it was windy, but clear outside. It started thundering and raining. It got really dark outside, and the clouds began moving. Streaks of lightning were reflected in the windows, and I could hear the loud noise of a tree breaking [...]

Should I continue this story? Is it good?

Friday, October 16th, 2009

“Hurry mum! Hurry!” Alan shouted and ran faster towards the toy store, faster then any dog I have ever seen.
“Careful!” I said, taking hold of his hand. “You might slip and fall. You don’t want to get hurt now do you?”
“But mum-“
“What is this very important thing you need to show me? The last time [...]

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